Other peoples opinions on sequence

Today we showed off our first edit of our final piece so we were able to obtain other peoples opinions on the basic idea. Apart from the initial cheering after Jack released his nipple in bed the reaction was good, people loved the basic idea and the camera cuts in time with the music.
We did receive some vital criticisms though which we could use to improve our final opening sequence.
-We need to make sure that the camera is always in focus on Jack when he is moving s at the moment he is quite blurry which makes it difficult to read his facial expressions. 
-The Music must always be in time with the cuts of the editing so that the sequence flows well.
So our cuts when they speed up on a quicker beat is heading down the right track so we will need more of that.
-The titles when added will have to appear in scenes where either nothing much is going on so its easy to read or so that they flow out of movements in the sequence making the sequence look much more interesting and still easy to read without distracting the audience away from the actual acting.